Response to Steven's Piece

Good job, Steven! This piece is filled with information. The information is great and it would be a very interesting piece for someone who knows a bit about the Orthodox faith. Maybe include a little bit more explanation for people who don’t know as much about the Orthodox faith. Who is the audience that you are aiming this piece at? This seems like it would make a good magazine piece. Also, what type of piece are you trying to write? Is this just you encountering the Orthodox faith or are you trying to make a point about it? Flesh yourself out in this piece or maybe take yourself out of it because you are very present in it without doing too much. The amount of detail included in here is staggering, I’m just not sure of what you are trying to say or impart onto the reading audience. Perhaps talk a bit about how the church interacts with the community around it? You talk about needing a conclusion, which is true, but I’m not sure that I understand the final paragraph that you have either. What does that mean? Why does the priest not think that you will bring it back? Where does martyrdom fit into the picture? I look forward to your final draft! Good luck.