Response to Jessica's Piece

Jessica- You have a really fascinating piece. The subject matter is something that is definitely important today with the constant changes in college admissions. Were you interested in describing the students who got into predominantly Ivy League schools because they are so selective or was there another reason? Overall, I think you have a really insightful piece and this will develop into something that will be really instructive for people, especially parents of middle school or high school children. My biggest suggestion is maybe to try to cut up some of the large blocks of quotations that you have. They’re good but they really take up much of the piece and the sheer size of them can be a little distracting and take away from your voice. How does Mr. Streeter compare to others who do the same job or how does this fit into the larger picture. I think you have the start of a really great piece here, good luck!