Response to Anna's Profile

Wow, this piece didn’t go where I thought it would initially go from your comments in class at all and I think you did a really good job. Not knowing Victor, I became really invested in the story that you were telling. Your descriptions of him gave me such a vivid impression of his physical presence and I really began to think that this could be a good piece for like the Lux Esto magazine as an example of how alumni can continue to give back to K after graduation. You did a really good job of weaving music and gardening together, maybe there would be some way to see if you could catch him singing on the job or something like that? That would be a great moment for your piece. The ending to your piece seemed a little tacked on, I think what you have there is great background and information but it really isn’t an ending. Perhaps, bring it back to the Bach, because they you would have Bach in the beginning, middle and end of the piece. Have you listened to his album yourself? Maybe include a bit more description of it or a little review of it yourself. Great piece though and I look forward to the final draft!