Response to Anna's Piece

Anna- Good job! I just need to say that I loved a lot of your word choices. “Nurturing creative dreams”, “Camaraderie”, “snakes its way”, these are all really emotive phrases that help to give your piece a lot of narrative drive and power. I think you had a great idea to concentrate on the Park Trade building as it just appears to be fascinating place with a ton of different stories waiting to be told. You do a great job of describing the place and the work that is being done there. My biggest suggestion would be to perhaps add some more quotations. I’m sure that can be done as you interview more people. If you have time to do some interviewing there during the Art Hop, that would be fantastic material, I’m sure. You also have a great grasp of the history of the place, maybe try to show how that connects to the work that is being done inside of it now and even a connection with the larger community? This is the beginning of a really fascinating piece and it certainly made me want to go back and check it out more fully than I had before. Good job!