Response to Anna's Piece

Wow, this was a really moving piece. While, this is clearly a work of journalism, I found myself becoming very involved in the story of Eva and your retelling of the story. Your use of details is great, especially in the third-to-last paragraph where details such as “A5272” and “flesh-colored bra and underwear” really gave me a visceral impression of the scene and it was almost like I had been there myself. The opening of your piece is good in the way that we are thrown into this story just as you, yourself, were thrown into the role.
Another good thing about your piece is that you really succeeded in getting it to flow and in a manner that isn’t totally linear which I really admired and might try emulating myself. The one paragraph has a great use of repetition of the word “how” and that illustrates the terrible monotony of nearly unfathomable horrors that Eva had visited on her and also serves to highlight her ability to survive all of them. The penultimate paragraph where, on stage, you internalize Eva’s struggles is also very powerful and well-written. Overall, this is a really great piece. Good job!